Good Effort But
I Believe you are playing the begining melody a half step out of tune. When I play this song i start on the 16th fret of the B string it sounds like you started on the 17th. This is jsut speculation so maybe i'm wrong. But besides that I can tell you put some work into this. I think you could crank up the distortion a little more. THis song deserves to be turned uip to 10 (or 11)!